Proud Mommy Moment

Yet again, my oldest child had a small writing assignment and, in my opinion, did a great job!  Yes, I realize he’s mine and others may not be quite as optimistic about his writing ability as his momma…  But hey, if I can’t use my blog to promote my amazing boys, then what’s it for??

The assignment was to create a short story (about half a page), the only criteria given was that someone should be running from something..  Here’s what he wrote.

He ran after her.  Running for her life, she was terrified.  She looked behind her and there he was.  A mysterious, shadowy figure chasing her.  He looked to be at least seven feet tall and very muscular.  There seemed to be no break in the dim forest they were running through when suddenly she heard a deep grungy voice behind her yell CAROLINE!  She almost jumped out of her skin screaming.  How do you know me?  All of a sudden out of no where a river appeared in front of her.  She looked around and there was no place to hide and no place to run.  He gets to her and wraps his hands around her neck.  She can’t breath.  Her vision is going blurry.  She is still being choked.  She can’t see now.  Then suddenly, she wakes up.  Her mom is calling her so she isn’t late for school.  She was shaking all day.

Keep in mind, he’s 14 years old.  I did not do any editing to the story.  I feel like I should post it just as he wrote it.  It’s a very short little story, but that was the assignment.  I think it has quite a dark feel to it and I was starting to be concerned as I was reading it, but once I got to the end I realized he was describing that feeling more than anything else.. the feeling you can get from an intense dream such as this, or just the general claustrophobic feelings you can sometimes wake with.

I am posting this with his permission and will be sharing your comments with him.  Thank you for reading!

In my comment below, I mentioned another story he wrote and I posted.  It was not as easy as I expected to find it, so if you’d like to see more of his work, click here.

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14 thoughts on “Proud Mommy Moment

  1. chicmom2016 says:

    Wow!! Awesome job!!

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  2. Rocker Mom says:

    I’m really impressed! I know I’m late to the party but I had to tell you (and your son) how impressed I am by his writing!

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  3. Being a published writer of horror shorts, I want to say, “He’s pretty darn good.” Punctuation and spelling and basic grammar can be all learned. The feeling, energy carried throughout the story? That is something of skill…I look forward to more.
    Scott

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  4. Connie Booher says:

    This was very good! I also could see the things he was describing in the story. Good Job!!

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  5. stephsgrn says:

    Ok, it wasn’t as easy to find.. I’m not great at categories and tags. I’ve added a link to another (longer) story of his to the bottom of the post. Please feel free to check it out.

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  6. stephsgrn says:

    Thanks you guys! Unfortunately, he is completely uninterested in writing! He says it’s boring! That’s why I post anything he writes, so he can hopefully get encouragement to write more! Here I am wishing I could put my stories into a readable format that others will enjoy and he’s over here writing up a storm and not interested! Kills me! There is at least one other story of his, probably also titled Proud Mommy, or something of that sort. Feel free to check them out and let him know what you think!

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  7. Shannon says:

    Loved it! Reminded me of the books I would read in school. Wish there was more!

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  8. Wow! When is his first book launch!

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